Tuesday, May 13, 2008

Beauty in the Shadows

Comes now PROMPTuesday, Exercise #4. Click on over to visit Deb at San Diego Momma to read the other entries or, even more fun, create one. Go ahead. It only takes ten minutes.


Beauty in the Shadows

Well he was just seventeen. You know what I mean? His eyes were brilliant blue, his nose was ever so slightly crooked, and his brown hair was perfectly feathered. He sauntered when he walked, and it played out even if he didn’t wear Levis and did wear button down shirts with an understated pinstripe to school. He was new to the school, from Des Moines, Iowa. He was cool because he wasn’t a surfer, or a stoner, or a soc, or a jock, or a nerd. He was cool because he was just a guy from Iowa. With perfectly feathered hair and brilliant blue, staring eyes. He stared at me in Beginning Guitar in first period. He stared at me in U.S. History in sixth period. His staring blue eyes were a pair of bookends in my school day. I wondered whom he stared at in periods two through five. But one day at the end of period six, he told me he liked my gold, heart-shaped Monet earrings. He said they glowed from across the room when we watched films in class. We became high school sweethearts. But I knew one thing that none of the other girls knew. Feathered Hair McBlue Eyes was a mama’s boy. And mama didn’t want her boy to have a girlfriend. Just like my earrings glowed in the darkened classroom when we watched history films, our love glowed like beauty in the shadows of his mother’s watchful eye.

23 comments:

Sojourner said...

Nice story. Nicely written. I can feel the trouble building.

Law Student Hot Mama said...

Oooh! Muy sexy! I want to hear the next installment.

dkuroiwa said...

"He was cool because he was just a guy from Iowa."
I love that!! I'm pretty sure I giggled there!!
Very nice intro to a longer story if you ever wanted to do something like that!!!

Jenn @ Juggling Life said...

You're good at this!

My Ice Cream Diary said...

"His staring blue eye were a pair of bookends in my school day."

You sure can write, woman. And sometimes having to hide a romance makes it all the more fun. =)

Becoming Me said...

You are an excellent writer. I'm so glad I found your blog

aaryn b. said...

very, very nice.

Don Mills Diva said...

Very well done!

mommypie said...

Nice job! You paint a great picture.

I've been too chicken to attempt San Diego Momma's Prompts. You've inspired me to MAYBE give it a shot ...

Misty said...

More, more, MOOORRREEEEE!

Denise said...

Awesome!!

I had those same Monet earrings. :o)

debawriter said...

SO good, Cheri.

Deb
sandiegomomma.com

just jamie said...

Will you work subsequent chapters into future posts, please?

P.S. Don't Google him.

Family Adventure said...

So well written! Is it true??

Heidi

Family Adventure said...

So well written! Is it true??

Heidi

Amber M. said...

I GOTTA know what happens next...

You write beautifully.

Janet said...

sounds like my ex-MIL ;-)

Stu said...

You had me at crooked nose.

History films are Jr. High foreplay. I remember taking the darkness to steal a few glances.

-Stu

Bunny Bunster said...

But, can he dance??

apathy lounge said...

What's going to happen next? I'm almost afraid to find out.

Trish said...

If it's at all possible, I am more in luv with you than I was before.

Just Jamie... why NOT Google him?
Just because you might find a manic-ly depressed bipolar chain smoking old man who lives in the dirtiest apartment in America? Right.

Umm Cheri, DON'T GOOGLE HIM!

katydidnot said...

you are awesome. you're responses to deb's prompts have been two parts brilliant, one part stirring, one part moving.

The Girl Next Door said...

Awesome. You inspired me to try the prompts. I was wayyyyy too late but did it anyway. Love your writing and your blog!